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Winter afternoon, Friday,
Sleet trickles like stray musings,
And she sits sipping coffee
At the window, peeking now
At faces familiar,
And still alien, unknown,
Seeking what changes people
When details are sought instead
Of a complete picture, and
Fingers a mole on her chin,
-Whisper in a picture hall
Not loud enough to disturb-
She wonders about jet planes then.
The End
This poem is an experiment
in form. There are 7 syllables in every line. 13 lines. A turn in the end.
Friend of mine attending a poetry workshop in Stanford had to work within these constraints for her assignment. I thought I'd give it a shot.
Would anyone else like to try this form out? I'd love to see your poems.
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Thats very cool - like the constraints - gives birth to freedom.
Liked it :)
Good poetry work out...
Meera
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Hey Shivanjali... glad you liked it. I tried another experimental poem- The Last Word, and posted it here. Check it out.
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Brilliant attemp man....try more of these..make interesting an innovative reads!
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Hey Blizzard,
Its actually not that tough... just keep it free flowing till line 13. At every 7th syllable go into a new line :)
Hey BMW,
Lucky you! I wish it was raining here. Love the musky smell of mud.
Cheers,
Tarun
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Interesting concept Tarun...
but seems hard...thinking of syllables when free flowing is easier :) :)
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dear tarun,
yep will its raining here and i am sipping coffee...no mole to finger though will scratching my goofy nose do? lol...
yeah i will...
later...
bmw.
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I don't think it's called anything. It was just an assignment.
Why don't you try it out?
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tarun,
Whats this form called? nice.
love the rains...and sipping coffee...
bmw.
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Hey Sophizz,
As only one poet knows another. Keep visiting.
Cheers,
Tarun
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how do you know me???
i loved this piece...
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